Wednesday, September 12, 2012

Just Fire

Annabel~Just Listen
Katniss~Catching Fire

Just Fire

    Today is the third Monday in July,  it’s also the first day that I meet my long lost cousin Katniss.  My name is Annabel,  i was told that i had cousins that i’d never met before.  But, I didn’t know that she was that interesting.  I mean , fought people till the death.  Thats crazy, right?  The people in this town are kind of quiet, nothing like that.  “Annabel” my mom called me. “what?”. “She is here”. “okay, on my way down”.  As i run down the stairs i see her standing in the doorway , bag in her hand.  “Hi” I said, “hey” Katniss replied.  “Annabel, this i Katniss” my mom introduced us.   I took her to the spare  room to put her things down.  Although she didn’t have much.  “So what do you do around here?” Katniss sounded interested.  “Well, theres the park, the movies, and the radio station downtown”.  “music, what kind, i've only heard so much music.  Only at the Capitol.”  “There is a whole different variety of music” me feeling excited that we might become very good friends.  “Maybe you could show me some time?”  asking as if we could do it at this exact moment.  I mean i get it she never gets to do any of this stuff.    I was told that where she lived they had such strict rules.  So she wants to do so much.   “Well since there is so much and that you are going to be here for a while , what do you want to do first?”.  “Well what's your favorite thing to do here?”.  “Well, actually today i have a commercial shoot.  Do you want to come?”  “you’re a model?” “Yah” “So do you want to come?” “Yah” “Do you want join me in the shoot?”
“Can I” She sounded so excited.  “Lets go!”  So as we were going to the shoot, she never took her eyes of the window.  She was just so fascinated by all of it.  I guess where she is from that she didn’t have anything like this.  I wonder what this is like for her?  As we are pulling up to the shoot she says to “ I’m nervous.” “it’s ok.” as I try to console her.  So we walk into the studio, i could tell that Katniss was overwhelmed.  I was hoping that she was going to be all right.  
    After the shoot was over we went to go get some ice cream.  She had no clue what the different were.  So I had to order for her, which wasn't bad, she said that she was open to anything.  So we both got mint chocolate chip in a cone, and started going home.  When we got home my mom was butchering us with questions.  Which to be honest i wasn’t that surprised i thought she was going to do that.  So we went up o whitney’s room and she was asking how everything was going.  And of course we said good.  I could tell that she was already having fun.  So we went up to my room, and i could already tell that we weren't just going to be cousins we were going to be great friends.

3 comments:

  1. 1. Hi karley, good job on your essay it was awesome!
    2. A quote that I liked in your story was,"So what do you do around here?”, I don't really know why.
    3. Your story really made sense to me, and I liked the way you wrote the story!
    4. One thing that you should fix is to capitalize (I) because everytime you wrote it you would right it like this (i) lol:)

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  2. Karley great job on your essay! It was very good! I agree with Lindsey there are a few times you have a (i) instead of a (I). Great job BFFL

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  3. Great job combining the two books Karley I really liked it.

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